After reading W4 from The Little Seagull, I realized that my essay could use some work. I used two different techniques described in the book and they were taking away sentences that do not correlate with the topic sentence and adding more description. I realized that I have a tendency to add sentences that are not necessary when arguing my point. I often times just put them in because it’s a “shitty first draft.” When reading over my essay, I noticed that I had too many of those sentences, which I took out. I also used the descriptive advise because it could make my essay stronger using more keywords. I like when I read a book or sentence that uses a lot of description. because it keeps me attached and focused in on what the author is trying to make you feel. Incorporating both of those techniques helped to strengthen and improve my essay because they will keep the reader focused and intrigued. All of the random sentences and not a lot of description may make the reader not stay on track and focused. I want to make my view as strong and convincing as possible.